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light and dark

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dark and light?
one another benight.
each is a curse and each is a boon;

one can just as easily get lost at high noon,
as one can truly find one's self beneath the moon.

end and beginning, equally hark;
from each other embark
light and dark.


30.12.16

a trois-par-huit  www.shadowpoetry.com/resources… written in rsponse to :iconthewritergang:'s Prompt Wednesday, Event Reminder Other Reminders ...i wanted to do both prompts in one piece because i am a taoist and a poetry nerd in equal measure :nerd:
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:star::star::star::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

The work has a definite emotional impact, with a good choice of wording. the visual style, a diamond shape, is clever and pleasing to the eye. Over all it has an emotional impact that makes me consider the duality of light and dark.

However, I do feel the artist could gone further on the subject, deeper into the terrors of night and the pain of what light reveals. Not a bad pome, but the artist might consider a longer work exploring this subject more deeply in future.

Grammar , spelling, and over all mechanics excellent. It flowed well from sentence to sentence. Though the geometrical shape was contrived, the flow of the work was not. Easy and clean to read.

It was worth the time, overall Excellent. I look forward to the artists net work
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